Practice 6. Peer-editing and self-editing (Part 2)

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ORIGINAL

Nowadays kids get very familiar with the technology from a very young age, and this affect them in many ways, not only the dependency that this creates, but because of the bad manners that are developed by the continuous use of the phone, which each generation get earlier than the previous. It can be seen in many situations in which people use the mobile phone in a bad was, situations as, the use of it on the car when your attention must be on the road, at the dinning table in moments that you are supposed to be with your family, or generally when you are surrounded by family, friends or any kind of people an you are only focused on your phone, making yourself apart from the others. At the end this shows that even an electronic device that useful for the daily life, it can develop bad habits that affect us in many situations.

 

CORRECTION

Nowadays, kids get very familiar with the technology from a very young age, and this affect them in many ways, not only in the dependency that this creates, also as the bad manners that are developed by the continuous use of the phone, which each generation get earlier than the previous. It can be seen in many situations in which people use the mobile phone in a bad way, as the use of the phone in the car when your attention must be on the road, at the dinning table in moments that you are supposed to be with your family, or generally when you are surrounded by family, friends or any kind of people and you are only focused on your phone, making yourself less interactive. At the end this shows that even an electronic device that useful for the daily life, it can develop bad habits that affect us in many situations.